song diary: new demos as I keep learning

[halyke]

Hi everyone,

I finally got into the creating aspect of music and wanted to share my efforts and keep track of my progress as well. I hope I can post songs frequently and listen to other users' music, too!
Here is the first track I posted on SoundCloud:
https://soundcloud.com/halyke/demo230419 (edit: removed)
Every kind of constructive criticism is well accepted!

[Reiodust]

Hi everyone,

I finally got into the creating aspect of music and wanted to share my efforts and keep track of my progress as well. I hope I can post songs frequently and listen to other users' music, too!
Here is the first track I posted on SoundCloud:
https://soundcloud.com/halyke/demo230419
Every kind of constructive criticism is well accepted!

Hi halyke,

it's very nice for a 1st try. I really enjoyed the nice intro that sounds quite creepy and the originality of the music. It's always interesting to discover something new. Your track reminds me some video games I played during my childhood.

About technical improvements I prefer to let someone else answer as im not very familiar with this kind of music. In any case keep it up! Improvements are open to everyone who works hard!

[fatraccoons]

The bass literally shakes my body through the headphones, so that's pretty neat. This is incredibly original, I hope you keep making stuff that's super out there and wild even as you get better with the software. It sounds very "Mother"-esque or like something that would be in Lisa the Painful RPG. The main thing I disliked about it was the drum part got kind of repetitive/overwhelming. The rhythm was interesting but I would add more dynamics, pan it to the right, and maybe reduce the volume or something to make it more pleasing to the ear.

[halyke]

I tried to follow the suggestions, so I tried to adjust the beat. Also, I added some "spoken word" (and changed the title), hope you like it!

https://soundcloud.com/halyke/lilium-tears

[brandystarbrite]

I tried to follow the suggestions, so I tried to adjust the beat. Also, I added some "spoken word" (and changed the title), hope you like it!

https://soundcloud.com/halyke/lilium-tears

Nice work. It has emotion and is quite a creative tune too.

[halyke]

I decided to re-record the vocals and put my previous songs together in a project! Let me know how you find it!

https://soundcloud.com/halyke/sets/old-drawings-retold

http://halyke.bandcamp.com/album/old-drawings-retold

[brandystarbrite]

I decided to re-record the vocals and put my previous songs together in a project! Let me know how you find it!

https://soundcloud.com/halyke/sets/old-drawings-retold

http://halyke.bandcamp.com/album/old-drawings-retold

Much better. They kinda sound a bit clearer too.
But the one called ignorance jaws nausea, the vocals don't sound too clear.
I guess that was intentional, to give an added spooky effect, to the track?

Concerning the artwork, that is some creepy art pics, you used for your tracks.
I will admit, you have a really unusual, spooky style in music.