I think personally that there is a potential with this melody. I initially wasn't impressed by the repetitive intro and the melody comes in a bit out of nowhere initially. I like very much the sound of the melody and the one accompagnying it. I imagined that if there were lyrics on that, could be a ...
This is very interesting indeed and this guy could be for you too (I follow that) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6oosN8jxzvQ
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