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First Song

Posted: Thu Aug 29, 2019 11:20 pm
by AnthonyB
Hello everyone,

Some of you may remember me as the author from the recent "Help for a Beginner" post.
Since then I have written parts of my first project and I would like your opinions regarding how to make it better.
I would like to pose my song as an attachment (as in shown here : https://i.imgur.com/dbL1sAC.png), but sadly I see "Poll creation" instead of "Upload attachment" so here I am with my brand-new soundcloud account.

https://soundcloud.com/user-133453329/project2/s-LCqAi

It's a work in progress, in particular there are three parts :

1) The intro + background which I really like
2) The melody, which I find OK. I would like to improve it though
3) The transition (what you hear at the very end). OK.

I would love advice on :

a) How to make my melody better, maybe also suggestions of LMMS instruments that would sound better than what I have
b) How to make a good transition between the "melody" and the "transition". You can very clearly hear a clear divide between both parts and I would like to make it better. If possible, I would keep the piano for the melody and the bass for the transition, but this may be a big part as to why going from the melody to the transition doesn't sound good.

Re: First Song

Posted: Fri Aug 30, 2019 7:53 pm
by AnthonyB
I discovered Automation. Automation is now my best friend.

Here is the new version : https://soundcloud.com/user-133453329/p ... -1/s-IiO5f

It's already much better, but I'm still very interested in any advice. The end is quite sudden and rushed, so if you have a good idea to end the song I'd be happy to hear it :)

Re: First Song

Posted: Mon Sep 02, 2019 5:41 pm
by AntsInThePants
Sounds good, the beginning reminded me of Blade Runner and movies like that. Can't give you any advice sadly :-D

Re: First Song

Posted: Thu Sep 05, 2019 4:48 am
by brandystarbrite
AnthonyB wrote:
Fri Aug 30, 2019 7:53 pm
I discovered Automation. Automation is now my best friend.

Here is the new version : https://soundcloud.com/user-133453329/p ... -1/s-IiO5f

It's already much better, but I'm still very interested in any advice. The end is quite sudden and rushed, so if you have a good idea to end the song I'd be happy to hear it :)
This version sounds much better, than the first version.
I will admit, you did some really good work, using lmms' automation. Very nice. :D

Re: First Song

Posted: Thu Sep 12, 2019 5:42 am
by Brantley36
Yeah actually it is much bettter than the first version..Lots of amendments and updates.So yeah it is actually better My Pasco Connect