Could i get some advices to progress ?

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Hello, i'm Pikachuk, i'm a young developer and composer of 16 years old.
I've started using LMMS some months ago in order to start composing some songs, my final objective would be to be able to compose songs with lyrics (or without) and vocaloid/utau that i could add to my game.
i usually love intense songs that produces intense feelings when i listen to them, such as this one
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mFtRP5enYAE
or this one
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2IH-toUoq3w
(i like various styles since the most important part for me is the melody and the lyrics, not the instruments)

I've actually already composed some songs, the first was "Eclipse" and the second one "Eclat"
"Eclipse" : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Yu9Z0TEUc8I
"Eclat" : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m-O0wjbSRJI
(the others songs on my channel were only some tests and were not good enough for me to consider them as "finished")

I don't feel like what i composed is "bad" but i feel like i miss something, something is not good enough.
Because i felt like i had not enough skill yet, i have made the two songs using simple violin and piano.
Usually when i think about intense songs, i would prefer some trance or rock, but because i've a lack of knowledge about it and i lack the skill to make it right i haven't done it...

that's why i'd like to know what you think about the songs i composed, what could be improved ? How could i improve my skills in order to reach the level i'm trying to reach ?
Thanks in advance for your advices.
Pikachuk wrote:
Sun Nov 05, 2017 2:28 pm
Hello, i'm Pikachuk,
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I don't feel like what i composed is "bad" but i feel like i miss something, something is not good enough.
Well you already have more likes, than i ever have had on my vids combined on that one song, so i cant guide you..
You actually also have more views than most of my tutorials
Because i felt like i had not enough skill yet, i have made the two songs using simple violin and piano.
Here i may have something for you, because you can improve your instruments, and your mix:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0mFHDyWGh9c
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BCbel56VuEU
Usually when i think about intense songs, i would prefer some trance or rock, but i've a lack of knowledge about it
Study song-structures. Learn how songs uses soft and strong parts in blocks, and how this structure can be variated
what could be improved ?
Instruments & mix
How could i improve my skills in order to reach the level i'm trying to reach ?
Most important is to know your toolbox 100%
Here i refer to lmms :)
Perhaps my LMMS rookie-guide can interest you? Link in signature.
Hello and welcome to the forums Pikachuk. :)

Okay: The first one Eclipse is a nice song.
But I agree, it seems to be missing something. More can definitely be added to it. :)

The second tune, "VS Selene theme - Eclat" is lovely and is the best, out of the two tunes.
It also sounds more complete too. Good work on this tune. :)

Also, don't forget to check out the links musikbear gave you. :D
Otherwise, regarding your request, there is no secret: practices, pratices, again and again.

Welcome!
Thanks for the replies, i'll try to watch the tutorials you sent