Looking for feedback on 1st track

[seacow]

Hey guys, I just posted my first original track the other day and I'm looking for ways to improve
https://soundcloud.com/seacowbass/modern-ottoman

[DJ FlyingPankakez]

Hey guys, I just posted my first original track the other day and I'm looking for ways to improve
https://soundcloud.com/seacowbass/modern-ottoman

Very nice for your first track! could definitely see some one rap to this.

[brandystarbrite]

Yep. I agree with DJ FlyingPankakez, this definitely needs a singer.

Though the sound effect at the start up is good, I'm not a fan of how this track starts up eg. 0 secs to 11 secs.
But then again, everyone has their own tastes in startups.

Maybe adding in some more melodies, and a few sound effects, especially during the silenced parts, could make
this track, sound more exciting, full and complete.

[musikbear]

Hey guys,

Hi -Welcome to the forum seacow! Here are all our important links:
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Yes fine track, but just as said already, it need either a vocal artist, or you could work with a edgy/ squiky saw, and make a good lead over it.

[seacow]

Thank you all so much I've been trying to find a saw plug in but have had no luck. What would be your recommendation to acquiring that sound? Thanks again!

[musikbear]

trying to find a saw plug in but have had no luck.

There is already several saw-presets in the default collections.
in the sidebar

https://lmms.io/wiki/index.php?title=Side_Bar
Use the search-function in the preset-browser,
and find them all
and use my tutorial on how to improve default presets:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0mFHDyWGh9c
and tweak one of the presets.
Other than those, I really recommend you to get Synth1
http://www.geocities.jp/daichi1969/softsynth/
and follow our instructions
https://lmms.io/wiki/index.php?title=Wo ... nt_Presets

[tracyoh!]

I like it.

The pacing of the track is nice and the spacey phasy sounds in the back give it a natural feel.

[peefTube Music]

It's pretty good for your first track!