My 1st song with words

[Danarama]

So two weeks or so ago I looked at the time I had spent playing video games and decided I wanted a tangible skill developed instead or arguably wasting my time. I downloaded LMMS re-taught myself how to read sheet music after a couple of decades break from grade 10 music and started playing around. A couple of video tutorials later and after much playing around I have strained my brain to compose a chorus-verse something and this is what has come out

https://soundcloud.com/user-657118302/s ... al_sharing

I know it's not properly finished, but I've spent a full day on it so far and but would be interested in some feedback/guidance? (keeping in mind I have little idea what I'm doing or quite probably what you're talking about)

[brandystarbrite]

What you have so far sounds nice, and it has a really pleasant sound to it too. Maybe putting in a simple pad melody in the background, might make this track sound extra nice, and make it sound more complete.