pop corn troubles

[gps2013]

Latest version, need to find some rhythm.

Feedback welcome.
And the end is not finished either, as you can hear.

https://soundcloud.com/user586365033/popcorn4

[gps2013]

And I am back.
I would like to get some feedback.

Not it it sounds nice, I am far from happy, but far more important is this in tune ?

Is there still hope for me ?

https://soundcloud.com/user586365033/popcorn3

[zonkmachine]

...is this in tune ?

Rather in the wrong key(s) and constantly changing mode.

Is there still hope for me ?

There is always hope but arranging songs is shooting quite a bit over the target if you don't know by ear if something is in tune / in the right key / in the right mode, or not.
Do you play any instrument?

[gps2013]

if its not out of tune , I am making progress.

My problem in general is, I can hear its not right, but I am lost on what's wrong...

I do not play an instrument yet.

About the changing mode, If I understand you right,this is what I use as example:
They do the same ?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YK3ZP6frAMc&feature=kp

Edit:
I trying to copy the song from hot butter.
I also use a synthesia vid, but their sublead is different.

For one it starts sooner.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_nGsxpLGUIc

And maybe some one understand synthesia better then me, I am lost on how to find the right key from that vid.

[zonkmachine]

I can hear its not right, but I am lost on what's wrong...

I think this might be because you are having many little errors/oddities all over the arrangement which makes it hard to find the red thread in there.
Unfortunately I don't have time to go into the precise errors. Try and work on one track at a time and start with the baseline or the melody.

I do not play an instrument yet.

Then do learn an instrument. It's hard to do music without getting it into the body through playing a guitar/keyboard or
some other instrument first. And when you do pick up an instrument, don't forget to practice with a beat/metronome.
That'll prepare you even more for future adventures in sound.
Basically you're just inexperienced with listening and you just need to keep it up and it'll all clear up in time.

[gps2013]

Try and work on one track at a time and start with the baseline or the melody.

That is exactly what I have done.

I even have the popcorn song imported into lmms, to get the timing right.

I also set a scale in LMMS, major, and made sure every note is on a blue line.

Still I get feedback, something is wrong.
I almost start to wonder if that synthesia vid is the problem, or I am misinterpreting something..

I do have a keyboard ( M49e ) ( master keyboard, you need a midi device or a pc to make sound)
If some one can recommend a good tutorial and or lessons ?

[gps2013]

I found a better synthesia vid.

Tthis is the version I am after, but far more important it tells me were C3 is at.

I am already seeing differences with that other synthesia vid.
This one had the correct sub lead.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CT3rMP0VGZ0

never give up never surrender.

For other who are struggling like me, you can download you tube vids, then play them in vlc, and change the playback speed.

[gps2013]

Progress, the scale is not major.
When I pick Dorian, all notes are at a blue line.

I was two keys off. ( main melody)

[gps2013]

Upon futher study of my song, I have found more mistakes.
The rhythm was close but no cigar.

Main lead, close but no cigar, not the first parts, but there are mistakes in the following parts.

I will first fix the rhythm, then the main lead, then I will have a look at the sub leads.
Now that I know what keys it should be, finding the scale should not be a problem anymore.

For now I am happy, and hope to have something to "show" soon.

[Sti-Jay]

We hope too

And if you get tired of making only one song, being hundreds of others! Seemingly successful artists aren't necessary good at making music, they just create a lot and then post a few to the world! At least that is what some do. Others trash the idea already in their head So you got to make songs, many songs, and then some more