Finally a beat with lyrics is here! Lookin for some feedback

[Jbarn]

Made this little fine tune today and put some lyrics on top of it.
Just messin around looking for feedback. If I get some good feedback ill continue making
more things like this one.

Link: https://soundcloud.com/jbarn97/trends

[D.Ipsum]

(I want to say that bad feedback can be more formative than flattery)

This might interest you:

- Observation: the two voices seem centered in the stereo space. This gives the impression that they are in the same place, or that they occupy the same position in space.

- An idea: to spatially differentiate the secondary voice of the main voice.

- For example : to keep the main voice centered and offset the secondary voice (with PAN applied after FX like reverb). The secondary voice can even be re-recorded (to have two tracks). So one could be placed more to the left and the other to the right. You can also reverberate the two voices differently (for example, a little less reverberation on the main voice).

[Jbarn]

(I want to say that bad feedback can be more formative than flattery)

This might interest you:

- Observation: the two voices seem centered in the stereo space. This gives the impression that they are in the same place, or that they occupy the same position in space.

- An idea: to spatially differentiate the secondary voice of the main voice.

- For example : to keep the main voice centered and offset the secondary voice (with PAN applied after FX like reverb). The secondary voice can even be re-recorded (to have two tracks). So one could be placed more to the left and the other to the right. You can also reverberate the two voices differently (for example, a little less reverberation on the main voice).

Depending on what you consider " Bad Feedback " is I'm not sure.
But your feedback is quite the opposite.
Bad feedback would be saying " This Sucks " " You can't improve " " Go work as a janitor music isn't for you "
I consider good feedback being something that makes me either A - Feel good about the work I did or B - Some information that can be valuable for my learning curve to being the best musician/beat maker/artist ever.
So you've succeeded and I appreciate the feedback.
This was the first track i attempted to put any lyrics onto anything and I was planning on making another version just because the one I posted was done quickly.
Usually everything you do gets better with time and experience, so I'm sure after a while I'll get it down =).
Again, thanks for the feedback and I am picking up what you're putting down totally.
My question for you would be, should I pan every other hype man or how should that go?

[D.Ipsum]

Yeah, something like "You can not improve" or "Go work as a music is not for you" does not help.

So about your question, “should I pan every other hype man or how should that go? “, I don’t know, I have never used any vocal tracks. But to experiment different possibilities seems to be the only way to improve your tracks (so, playing with automations, reverb automations, paning, voice layering, chorus, other).

[Jbarn]

Yeah, something like "You can not improve" or "Go work as a music is not for you" does not help.

So about your question, “should I pan every other hype man or how should that go? “, I don’t know, I have never used any vocal tracks. But to experiment different possibilities seems to be the only way to improve your tracks (so, playing with automations, reverb automations, paning, voice layering, chorus, other).

Alright, appreciate it.
Only solution i really see would to just be experimenting so I'll definitely try it all out

[brandystarbrite]

Made this little fine tune today and put some lyrics on top of it.
Just messin around looking for feedback. If I get some good feedback ill continue making
more things like this one.

Link: https://soundcloud.com/jbarn97/trends

Okay. One big problem, is that when the vocals come in from 28 secs
his voice seems distant and too low in volume.
I could almost barely hear what he is singing. A good volume raise, will solve that in no time.

Tip: Try to balance the music volume and vocals volume. Especially the vocals volume.
And feel free, to repost the tune back on soundcloud and repost it here, for us to listen to it.

From what I've heard so far, I'd say, this tune sounds like it has good potential.
And the beats sound good too man. Nice work there.

[Jbarn]

Made this little fine tune today and put some lyrics on top of it.
Just messin around looking for feedback. If I get some good feedback ill continue making
more things like this one.

Link: https://soundcloud.com/jbarn97/trends

Okay. One big problem, is that when the vocals come in from 28 secs
his voice seems distant and too low in volume.
I could almost barely hear what he is singing. A good volume raise, will solve that in no time.

Tip: Try to balance the music volume and vocals volume. Especially the vocals volume.
And feel free, to repost the tune back on soundcloud and repost it here, for us to listen to it.

From what I've heard so far, I'd say, this tune sounds like it has good potential.
And the beats sound good too man. Nice work there.

Hey I appreciate that, and I do agree I could make it alot better.
To be quite honest it wasn't really a full production I guess you could say.
A lot of unfinished work haha, but appreciate the feedback as always!