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Hi! I posted a short version of this song awhile back, and after a bit of working (and procrastinating) I finished it!

Please give me some feedback on the song if you can. I only want to improve!

https://soundcloud.com/user-130037238/n ... d-full-ver

I can see the potential of this song.(The way it will evolve)

Background kick's reverb downing would be better I think

Yes! I was expecting an extended version!

The detuned part between 00m48s and 01m08 is surprising.
At the first listen, I was a little disappointed by this part.
Now I got used to it.
Maybe this part comes a little too early (00m48s) (?).
In this part, maybe a highpass or a 4x4 allpas on the drums would work well, it would leave the synth out of tune in the foreground (?).

Although it did not shock me, I'm going in the direction of simplework, maybe a shorter reverb on the kick would be better. I do not know.

In any case, I like it

Really liked it.
The variation with the main melody towards the end was a nice touch. Kept it fresh and exciting 'til the end.
As for suggestions for improvements, I just feel it could be a bit longer. Maybe taking what D.Ipsum mentioned into consideration and adding another section would help with that.
But in any case, good job!

D.Ipsum wrote: ↑

Sat Aug 12, 2017 9:13 pm

The detuned part between 00m48s and 01m08 is surprising.
At the first listen, I was a little disappointed by this part.
Now I got used to it.
Maybe this part comes a little too early (00m48s) (?).
In this part, maybe a highpass or a 4x4 allpas on the drums would work well, it would leave the synth out of tune in the foreground (?).

I was planning to make a few more updates, in the near future. I have so far edited the parts you have pointed out, and I feel like they glide into each other better than before (For instance, the transition from all the instruments down to the mallets has been extended to fit better)

I have also tweaked the drums to fit to that part better.

Thanks for the feedback!

insonico wrote: ↑

Sun Aug 13, 2017 2:00 am

Really liked it.
The variation with the main melody towards the end was a nice touch. Kept it fresh and exciting 'til the end.
As for suggestions for improvements, I just feel it could be a bit longer. Maybe taking what D.Ipsum mentioned into consideration and adding another section would help with that.
But in any case, good job!

Thank you!

I have tweaked the transitions to... well... transition into each other better. I have also tweaked the drums to fit in the middle section.

I am planning on making updates on the song every now and then, making it longer, and making tweaks on instruments and percussion.

It sounds nice so far.

It sounds nice so far.

Impatient to listen to the next version