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Hello, I haven't yet had any feedback on a track I made and I would appreciate it if some of you could possibly listen to my track 'Breathless' and give me some of your opinions and tell me what to improve.

https://soundcloud.com/zere-x

Awesome tune from start to finish.
That build up part, from 26 secs, sounds really cool.

Strangely, I think of cutey girl Sakura, from Street Fighter, whenever I listen to it. O_o

PS: There is an abrupt dip in the track, from 3:10 to 3:12 secs.
It's possible that might be, an upload error.

Okay: Now for your other tracks.

Falling: Amazing tune.

Confusion: Not my style. But it still sounds good.
That was an interesting change, from 2:23 secs upwards.

Collision: Cool start up. And cool tune.
I love the synth sounds, used in this one too.
But one thing I noticed, is that the start up, seems to start abruptly.
It's like if, part of the beginning, has been cut off.
And the ending of the tune, seems to cut off abruptly too.

Overall, 4 nice tracks, ya got there.

You're welcome!

All in all, your tracks are pretty happy, full of ideas. But the mixes are still a bit messy.

I think your bass instruments sound a bit too loud and too wide.

On Collision and Breathless, the end cuts too abruptly.

brandystarbrite wrote: ↑

December 30th, 2017, 2:39 am

Awesome tune from start to finish.
That build up part, from 26 secs, sounds really cool.

Strangely, I think of cutey girl Sakura, from Street Fighter, whenever I listen to it. O_o

PS: There is an abrupt dip in the track, from 3:10 to 3:12 secs.
It's possible that might be, an upload error.

Thanks man! I really appreciate the feedback. Yeah the overall mix isn't all that great as those are just demos but I'll clean them up as soon as I can

Also, if you can I'd be really grateful if you could give me your opinion on this new track I just posted
https://soundcloud.com/zere-x/glazed-edm-track

Thanks again dude!

D.Ipsum wrote: ↑

December 30th, 2017, 10:26 pm

You're welcome!

All in all, your tracks are pretty happy, full of ideas. But the mixes are still a bit messy.

I think your bass instruments sound a bit too loud and too wide.

On Collision and Breathless, the end cuts too abruptly.

Thanks dude! Glad you gave an honest opinion, I'll definitely be fixing up the tracks to make them finish smoother and sound clearer soon.

zerexx wrote: ↑

January 1st, 2018, 11:45 pm

Also, if you can I'd be really grateful if you could give me your opinion on this new track I just posted
https://soundcloud.com/zere-x/glazed-edm-track

Thanks again dude!

No probs.

Okay, concerning the track in the link, it seems to have been removed.

brandystarbrite wrote: ↑

January 3rd, 2018, 2:45 am

zerexx wrote: ↑

January 1st, 2018, 11:45 pm

Also, if you can I'd be really grateful if you could give me your opinion on this new track I just posted
https://soundcloud.com/zere-x/glazed-edm-track

Thanks again dude!

No probs.

Okay, concerning the track in the link, it seems to have been removed.

Oh oops!
https://soundcloud.com/zere-x/glazed

zerexx wrote: ↑

January 3rd, 2018, 5:21 pm

Oh oops!
https://soundcloud.com/zere-x/glazed

Music sounds nice.
And you fixed alot of the problems, you had in the first version of this track.

Advice time:
During the hihat, melody build up part, from 51 to 58 secs, the melodies and beats
seem to be playing, out of sync, with each other.

The same, out of sync melodies and beats problem, is also present, in the original version
of your track too.
Somehow, I forgot to mention that, when you posted the first version of your track.