Second track

[raphinou]

Hi,

Here is my second track: https://soundcloud.com/user-632665675/second

It's all done with lmms, and is more coherent from start to end than my first track. I'm very satisfied of the result.
Looking forward to your feedback though, as there's certainly a lot to improve that I don't know of!

PS: Thanks @brandystarbrite for the link sent in another thread to create the shh wave-like sound

[brandystarbrite]

Hi,

Here is my second track: https://soundcloud.com/user-632665675/second

It's all done with lmms, and is more coherent from start to end than my first track. I'm very satisfied of the result.
Looking forward to your feedback though, as there's certainly a lot to improve that I don't know of!

PS: Thanks @brandystarbrite for the link sent in another thread to create the shh wave-like sound

This tune is cool.

Okay: One thing I noticed, is that this whole tune, needs some volume balancing.
Some sounds get way to loud unexpectedly.
eg. That part from 1:07 to 1:09 secs, is a good example of this.

The intro is nice, but I think a bit more can be added to it.

The part from 1:10 to 1:30 is nice too.

I like the part from 1:30 to 2:14, when the bassy sounding synth sound plays.
It sounds really cool. And so does the part after it. But I think some volume balancing,
is needed here.

The ending, is not bad at all.

[brandystarbrite]

PS: Thanks @brandystarbrite for the link sent in another thread to create the shh wave-like sound

No probs dude. Hope it helped you alot.

[raphinou]

Thanks for your feedback! I'm a bit late to answer, but still interested to progress

Okay: One thing I noticed, is that this whole tune, needs some volume balancing.
Some sounds get way to loud unexpectedly.
eg. That part from 1:07 to 1:09 secs, is a good example of this.

I like the effect that these 2 seconds are taking over and acting as the end of the intro. I like ti have some kind of climax there. How can I achieve such an effect without the problem you mention?

The intro is nice, but I think a bit more can be added to it.

What would you suggest? I like the progression during the intro and would like that characteristic. I've already added a lot and I'm not sure what I can add without it getting dissonant...

The part from 1:10 to 1:30 is nice too.

I like the part from 1:30 to 2:14, when the bassy sounding synth sound plays.
It sounds really cool. And so does the part after it. But I think some volume balancing,
is needed here.

The ending, is not bad at all.

Those are my preferred part too indeed

[brandystarbrite]

The intro is nice, but I think a bit more can be added to it.

What would you suggest? I like the progression during the intro and would like that characteristic. I've already added a lot and I'm not sure what I can add without it getting dissonant...

In the intro, I think adding a calf vintage delay, or an echo effect to the synth pluck, might make that sound, sound a bit more cooler.