My first song.

[D-Mitry]

Any suggestions for how I can improve?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pEEs3RAjORc

[FilthyWizard]

A little more variation might help. To be honest though, it's pretty good for your first song. It's certainly more melodic than my first track was.

[brandystarbrite]

Any suggestions for how I can improve?

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pEEs3RAjORc

Not bad at all.
This tune and the melodies in it, sound really nice. And I like the pleasant style of it too.

I agree, that a few more melodies/melody variations, would do good for this tune.
But overall, you did a very good job with it. Nice.

[D-Mitry]

A little more variation might help. To be honest though, it's pretty good for your first song. It's certainly more melodic than my first track was.

Thank you very much! its not really my "first" song. But its my first song posted on the forum. I agree, a little more variation would help it sound more alive.