Any feedback appreciated for a downtempo song (updated)

[prfukup]

Here's my song, (updated) I've been struggling with creating any structure for a song beyond 4 bars. Any feedback is greatly appreciated.

Edit: Do you think the floppy drive writing sample sounds unnecessary? The whole song started with wanting to use a sample from Darude-Sandstorm on 8 floppy drives (he provides individual drive tracks in the description )

Edit2: Updated Soundcloud track. Still a work in progress!

[Leche]

Quite synthy. I like the way it transitions at 0:40. I also like the Violins in it.
I give it a 1% (8 out of ten)

[farawayinspace]

This is one of the coolest things I've heard on this website. I love the rattle-y, strange, industrial percussion: both the texture, rhythm, and feeling. I want this song to grow and become something more!

Edit: Do you think the floppy drive writing sample sounds unnecessary? The whole song started with wanting to use a sample from Darude-Sandstorm on 8 floppy drives (he provides individual drive tracks in the description )

[musikbear]

First i thought like 'ambient/industrial', but your violin makes it different. Your 'found-sound' floppy works fine.
To get past the 4 bars, you could make a dark drop, and then lift it back with the violin, or drive it up with more strings, and then back down again to the theme ?

[prfukup]

Thanks for the comments! I have to expand it a lot and try to make that theme go somewhere. Interesting stuff on the structure too, that's a great example of a way to tie the whole thing together nicely. I have to learn to think on a whole song's scale so they won't be just bags of things.