My First Song

[obnoxify]

Would love feedback on this.

Thank you

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qiLGN-mbFbg

[brandystarbrite]

Would love feedback on this.

Thank you

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qiLGN-mbFbg

Alright! Rad beat dude!

Tip: Okay. Try to find a way, to make the vocals sound a bit clearer, in the tune.

[Incorruptable]

Its powerful,

Correct me if i am wrong, but i think this style of music and the lyrical content would be frowned on in your country, is that who the lyrics are aimed at? The current ruling elite in Pakistan?

[obnoxify]

Would love feedback on this.

Thank you

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qiLGN-mbFbg

Alright! Rad beat dude!

Tip: Okay. Try to find a way, to make the vocals sound a bit clearer, in the tune.

Thank you . What do you feel like I could do to improve them?

[Anonymouqs]

The intro makes me feel so C H I L L

[DJB]

It's chill, but the vocals in the chorus need to be brought out more, and you need more variation in the hi-hats. Other than that, it's pretty good!

[obnoxify]

Its powerful,

Correct me if i am wrong, but i think this style of music and the lyrical content would be frowned on in your country, is that who the lyrics are aimed at? The current ruling elite in Pakistan?

Yep, on point. I'm the outcast lmao

[obnoxify]

The intro makes me feel so C H I L L

ayy.

[obnoxify]

It's chill, but the vocals in the chorus need to be brought out more, and you need more variation in the hi-hats. Other than that, it's pretty good!

Ty. Will do that. Just getting into mixing so feedback is really appreciated

[brandystarbrite]

Would love feedback on this.

Thank you

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qiLGN-mbFbg

Alright! Rad beat dude!

Tip: Okay. Try to find a way, to make the vocals sound a bit clearer, in the tune.

Thank you . What do you feel like I could do to improve them?

Try using one of lmms' equalizer plugins on the vocals.
Play around with the dials, and turn the dials anyway you want, until the vocals sound nice, clearer, and punchy enough for your style.