comments on sketch please?

[abcde111]

please delete this topic if i wasn't supposed to post works in progress.
i still need to train to be patient enough to finish a song, and i just wanted to post my sketch before i dump the whole thing.

it's a mellow electronic tune, inspired by pennybird's maybe (http://soundcloud.com/pennybirdrabbit/p ... bbit-maybe)
i made it this morning. it was raining, and i felt so mellow.
https://soundcloud.com/oriko-harada/mellow-rain-sketch

please tell me what you think
i've just started out at music making, so any advice / criticism is very much appreciated.

and a big thanks to everyone who helped me on the troubleshooting forum; your advice / answers has greatly increased my productivity.

also if you know any artists like pennybird, recommendations are appreciated

[brandystarbrite]

Interesting Mellow sounding tune.
The start up of the sound track, sounded like something from one of those Japanese Operas, where the
actors/actresses move really slow, with each sound and step.

My advice would be to make it a little bit more exciting. But then again, it's pretty alright.

For someone who just started making music, you did a pretty okay job.


Pennybird? Wooah! Strange yet interestingly Nice song. Interesting singer. For Real!
She seems unusal for a singer.
Her style is unusual too.
Nice.